Year after year, the ocean's most successful killer is not the great white shark. It's not the deadly jellyfish. Not even monster waves or hurricane-force winds. Your worst ocean nightmare during a day at the beach is more likely to be a rip current. I am the owner of the Lifeguard Drone, a company that is pioneering the way in the innovation of deployable flotation device drones to reduce the amount of time that it takes a lifeguard to reach a victim during an emergency. The United States Lifesaving Association concludes that more than 80% of rescues on surf beaches are due to rip currents. These lifeguarding drones are remote control operated and release a deployable flotation device for the victim to grab onto until a lifeguard can reach the victim and help him/her swim to shore. The drones will also be equipped with cameras to help with locating the victim in the water as well as look for sharks and other potential dangerous hazards in the water. The use of drones cuts down on the time it takes to reach the victim with a flotation device, ultimately leading to less drownings and deaths.
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
I received positive feedback for the applicability of my opportunity. The comments concluded that the use of lifeguarding drones during ocean rescues will help to cut down on the time it takes to reach the person in need. It was also believed that the lifeguard drone will help to cut down on the dangers of swimming.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
I added several features such as a camera and towing mechanism to the design of my product based on feedback through the interviews and my last pitch. I changed the approach to my first elevator pitch by adding and introduction and attention getter. I also included some facts about the problems occurring with rip currents and ocean rescues in the United States.
Wow, what a great idea. This is something I wouldn't realize so many people need. It is definitely an amazing preventative tactic. I think you were extremely clear about your product and what it does. I also really enjoyed your opening, it pulled me in. My only suggestion is to have a bit more enthusiasm in your presentation. You have an amazing idea and you should be proud. Check out my post http://ent3003sw.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
ReplyDeleteThis idea is awesome. You appear to have done a lot of research on this topic and to really know what you are talking about. Even though the pitch was not the most dynamic in the way the assignment asked, it definitely got me interested in the product.
ReplyDeleteHere is a link to my post: http://greywilliams3.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Your opening was great, but maybe a little more enthusiasm (by standing up maybe?). I think this is an awesome idea- I used to be a lifeguard back in high school. It's definitely a huge safety concern. This is super creative- maybe one of the most creative ideas I've seen. It was nice that you went into so much detail in your post after the pitch. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi there Greg!
ReplyDeleteIt is obvious that you did extensive research and really put a lot of thought into this business idea as well as the second elevator pitch. I think your idea is amazing and would help so many people and, as you have said, prevent immense numbers of deaths happening each year. A little advice on the pitch however, would be to sound a little more enthusiastic about the product and not seem like you're reading off a script. I think that would be helpful but other than that I think your idea has a lot of potential. Here is the link to my blog if you want to check my idea out: http://lbritthoff.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html