Elevator Pitch No. 4

Year after year, the ocean's most successful killer is not the great white shark. It's not the deadly jellyfish. Not even monster waves or hurricane-force winds. Your worst ocean nightmare during a day at the beach is more likely to be a rip current.  I am the owner of the Lifeguard Drone, a company that is pioneering the way in the innovation of deployable flotation device drones to reduce the amount of time that it takes a lifeguard to reach a victim during an emergency.  The United States Lifesaving Association concludes that more than 80% of rescues on surf beaches are due to rip currents.   These lifeguarding drones are remote control operated and release a deployable flotation device for the victim to grab onto until a lifeguard can reach the victim and help him/her swim to shore.  The drones will also be equipped with cameras to help with locating the victim in the water as well as look for sharks and other potential dangerous hazards in the water.  The use of drones cuts down on the time it takes to reach the victim with a flotation device, ultimately leading to less drownings and deaths.

2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch. 

     I didn't receive much feedback from my last elevator pitch compared to after my few elevator pitches.  The only suggestion I received was to be more enthusiastic with the pitch from the second pitch which I improved on in my third pitch.  The other comments were all positive feedback based on the plausibility and usefulness of the lifeguarding drone.  One classmate commented that he believes this is a very creative and innovative idea and one that he would have never thought of as he is from a landlocked country.  

3) What did you change, based on the feedback?

     I focused on adding more change in vocal tone and pitch and adding in hand gestures to go along with my pitch.  I also added more enthusiasm to my pitch this time around.  Also,  I added several features such as a camera and towing mechanism to the design of my product based on feedback through the interviews and my second elevator pitch pitch. I also included some facts about the problems occurring with rip currents and ocean rescues in the United States.